In Control - First Edit Feedback

I showed the first edit of the current footage I have for my Short Film to some of my peers and got some feedback. The main point I was given as feedback was that during the sequence of Jess body checking it was a bit confusing as to what was going on. Some suggested I had whispers playing over the top of the music in which there could be things said along the lines of 'you're so fat', 'you're absolutely disgusting' etc. Another suggested that I found tweets or quotes online that I could place on top of the screen to represent what Jess is thinking about. I am going to take this feedback on board and use it to improve my film.